Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – INT. CAR – NIGHT by Martin Keady

Watch the January 2017 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

Best Scene from the screenplay INT. CAR – NIGHT Screenplay
Written by Martin Keady
CAST LIST:NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
PATRICK – Hugh Ritchie
YOUNG MAN – David Occhipinti

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A middle-aged accountant has to drive home from work because there is a tube strike. When he stops at a traffic light, a young man taps on his windscreen – with a gun – and orders him to let him in.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The enforced meeting of absolute opposites, as a middle-aged accountant is carjacked by a crazed, gun-wielding drug addict.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and road movie.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because (I hope!) it takes the viewer on the same mad, uncontrollable journey that the hero (the middle-aged accountant) is taken on.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Carjacking vérité.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Withnail & I.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I must confess that this is one of the quickest scripts I have ever written – about a week, including a few all-nighters (fittingly, for a film about a carjacking that lasts a whole night).

How many stories have you written?

About 10 feature-length screenplays, including The Shakespeare Plays, a biopic of Shakespeare (http://theshakespeareplays.com/); about 20 to 30 short films; and about a further 10 stage plays and radio plays.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I was originally commissioned to adapt a novel about a carjacking that was so utterly unbelievable, implausible and plain atrocious that I just couldn’t do it. Instead, I was inspired to write an original screenplay about a REAL carjacking, which happened to a friend of mine and was utterly terrifying. She survived – just – and I thought that if I could take an audience on that journey I would have a great movie script.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Like all writers, a shortage of time. I was working during the day at the time, which is why I had to write it at night, which, of course, is the best time to write: no phone calls (or tweets, emails, etc.); no interruptions of any kind; and in addition your brain is naturally attuned to being halfway between sleep and waking, which is probably the best place to be as a writer.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Shakespeare (hence the Shakespeare biopic); sport (especially football and tennis, which I write about for LastWordOnSports.com); and (writing about and thus fighting in my own small way) injustice!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

After years (indeed, decades) of hiding my light under a bushel, as it were, I am finally determined to get my writing “out there” – whatever the response (good or bad, but hopefully not indifferent). The most useful part of the feedback was a comment about the title, “INT. CAR. NIGHT.”, saying that it did not really “fit” the story, as it was “too meta”. I understand and appreciate that, which is why, having thought about it, I would now switch the title back to one of the original two titles I had – either just “CARJACK” or “HIT THE NORTH”, a title borrowed from a great Fall song and utterly fitting for this story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – OCD by Quyen Tran

Watch the January 2017 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

Best Scene from the screenplay OCD Screenplay
Written by Quyen Tran

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
VIKTOR – Hugh Ritchie
DR. NAVID – Robert Notman
GWEN – Olivia Jon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Romance

Two university lovers have an intense argument.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

OCD (working title) is about a young woman who begins to have dark obsessions after an HIV scare.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama, Dark-Comedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

The script is currently 231 pages so it could be either a TV mini-series or film series. OCD should be made because it’s
an untold story relevant to the Millennial age.

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Digital Loneliness”

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

It’s a tie between The Santa Clause or Deathproof.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Almost a year now.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written several short stories but this is my first full-length story.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Something happened to me a year ago that left me in a state of devastation and I began writing this. It was the only thing that
made me feel better.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

A major obstacle was finding a quiet place to write. I live in a loud household. It’s hard to write when there is some annoying
noise going on. I’m still trying to find a quiet, private place. Mostly, I write at night when everyone is asleep. Headphones,
earplugs, and music/atmospheric sound help.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m currently reading Les Miserables by Victor Hugo, which I had put off for years because it looked so long and boring.
But I’m so glad I started, because so far, it’s one of the best stories I’ve ever read.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had also just rewritten the first scene so it was kind of a sign for me. Also, I found a coupon code on Facebook.

The feedback was paramount to my script’s consistent progress. It really encouraged me as a new writer, because it’s rare to get encouragement when people think you’re in your room all the time doing nothing, and you’re actually writing.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – CRIME CYCLE by Donald R Brown

Watch the October 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

CRIME CYCLE
Written by Donald R. Brown

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Crime, Thriller, Horror

A seemingly all-American family regularly rent out their guest home as a game to satisfy their urge to kill, but when their most recent tenants arrive they have a new set of plans in store for the sadistic bunch.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Michelle Alexander
MADELINE – Katelyn Varadi
ABIGAIL – Julie C. Sheppard
NATHANIEL – Gabriel Darku
JOSEPH – Rikki Wright
NEWS ANCHOR – Sandy Kellerman

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Crime Cycle is about a seemingly perfect All-American family that regularly rents out their guest home as a game to satisfy their urge to kill.

What genres does your screenplay under?

It’s a thriller/horror film.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because it captures the essence of race relations in our country today. It’s thought provoking. It’ll help people realize how close we really are to finding ourselves in a reality similar to the one in my script.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Overwhelmingly realistic

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Wizard of Oz

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

4 months

How many stories have you written?

9

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Hollywood. I wanted to write a script that demanded the attention of everyone from studio heads to agents and script readers.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Trying to find an end to enhancing the script. I’m a perfectionist, but at the same time I know there’s no such thing as the perfect screenplay. Struggling with that dynamic is always tough.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Reading. Movies. Anything that keeps my mind occupied. I try to have a real zest for life.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Persistence is crucial. You’ll probably fail over 100 times before you even get your first taste of success. Always be writing something.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson