1st SCENE Script Reading of GRAVITY’S PULL, by Robert Sivigny

Genre: Drama, Crime

An excellent séance fraudster evades police capture by faking his death.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Dr. Johnson: Geoff Mays
Maria: Ariel Brooker
Roy: Hugh Ritchie
Rosemary: Julie Burris
Voice of Dead Child: Pip Dwyer

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

An out of luck carnival medium tries for one last big score on a desperate widow, and discovers his act might not be a con after all.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama, horror.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

A story about the final scam of a carnival con man who claims to be able to speak with the dead: who wouldn’t be intrigued?

How would you describe this script in two words?

Gravity’s Pull.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Adventures of Baron Munchausen.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

A few years.

How many stories have you written?

50 or so.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Moritat (Sonny Rollins)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Always finding the time, and then the distance to read it objectively.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Not much.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

This script had some success in various contests, but little else. After putting it aside for a year, I decided to try another draft, and wanted to get some feedback on the first scene. I enjoyed your contest, and the feedback was worth the entry fee. The first scene and its aftermath become increasingly central to this story as it unfolds, so it was important for me to see if it worked, as odd visuals are quickly introduced. And the central question of whether you want to spend more time with this character.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning 1st Scene Reading of AVES, by Daniel L Burke

Winning Screenplay – AVES
Written by Daniel L. Burke

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julian Ford
ALFRED – Mandip Brar
GRAMPS – Allan Brunet
DR. BLACK – Sean Ballantyne
CHRISTINE – Amanda Quach
MARVIN – Zake O’Connor
DR. OHNO – Kayla Lakhani

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Horror

Mankind fights birds for control of planet Earth in an Apocalyptic battle of Armageddon.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

In the year 1980 residents of an Ohio town are rounded up and executed for the takeover of their land.

Now.

From the deepest part of space, a lost space probe filled with lethal alien radiation returns to earth. The President orders a strike of nuclear missiles.

On vacation, a horrified family watches the missile attack. They stare haplessly as the radiation from the destroyed probe encircles the planet. Filled with anxiety; the family attempts to returns home with the mother and son carrying a deep secret.

The alien radiation encircling the earth transforms the planet’s billions of birds to instruments of death and destruction. They are stronger, and more intelligent, and realize that man must die. Soon the Aves of the world join forces and attack.

In multiple battles, the fleeing family fights the violent birds on their quest to safety. Of the six-member family only two survive, the mother and daughter. The two finally reach their destination; a military bunker sitting deep in the Ohio hillside. In the fortified structure, the mother reveals her plan for world domination with her lover, the President’s leading General. The daughter realizes that she is the only one who can stop the insanity. It’s a fight between daughter, mother, the General and birds for rule of the planet. In the supreme battle inside the bunker, only the daughter survives. The finger of God saves the world as a massive solar flare cleans the atmosphere of the alien radiation.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Horror, Sci-fi, Drama, Suspense, Thriller, Action, Fantasy, Adventure

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Two reasons. The world needs quality entertainment. Second, it opens the door to my world of films.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Surpassing splendor

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

That’s a good question and I really don’t think I can answer it. And that’s because I watch my new movies until I wear out the grooves. Then I don’t watch them for awhile. But if I was on a deserted island with one movie; it would be “West Side Story.”

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

To be perfectly honest, it only takes me about a month to write the raw draft, another half month for the refined script. The problem isn’t the script but the research. It consumes all the time and can take weeks.

How many stories have you written?

If you include manuscripts I will say about thirty-five. If you want to just want to know about my screenplays including musicals I would say, twenty.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Shooting photography I saw a chorus line of birds sitting on electrical wires and that was it.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None really unless you count researching the subject, I wrote “Aves” and “Looking For Love” back to back and they both flowed like water. It took about three and a half months. I missed October, November, December and the first part of January.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Photography and music. Those are my two main passions after writing. I have photographs on my FaceBook page and Deviant Art. Also, I have pieces of music that I composed on some of the music sites.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had entered your Logline Contest and figured I would give it a shot. Man I was mad because the mistakes were minor but major to the script.


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*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning 1st Scene – Sandstorm by Neil Chase

Winning Screenplay – SANDSTORM
Written by Neil Chase

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Cora Matheson
MITCH – Daniel Chung
ROY – John Fray

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Thriller

Sandstorm is a disaster film about a single mom and her deadbeat ex who race to save their daughter as a massive sandstorm devastates their hometown.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Sandstorm is a disaster film about a single mom and her deadbeat ex who race to save their daughter as a massive sandstorm devastates their hometown.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Action, thriller.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It’s unlike other disaster films in that it’s written with a smaller budget in mind, and centers around the relationships and dysfunctional family dynamics of our lead characters more than on the spectacle of the devastation. That said, there’s something here for everyone – action, comedy, drama, and most of all, heart.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Fun ride.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Star Wars.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

The first draft took two weeks. Then a few months more for feedback and rewrites.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been writing since I was a kid, so it’s hard to say how many short stories there have been. That said, I’ve written thirteen feature screenplays, numerous short screenplays, and my debut novel is about to get published.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I always wanted to write a disaster film. So I picked one that I haven’t seen before.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None that I can think of. It was a fun experience from start to finish.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My other passion is acting, which actually helps me to be a better screenwriter, as I’ve learned where to focus in terms of dialogue, action lines, and so on. I try to write the kinds of scripts I would want to read as an actor.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The First Scene Screenplay Festival seemed like a great way to test the waters with this script. I’m grateful for the win.

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*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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1st SCENE Reading of THE DEBT, by Michelle Patkowski

Winning Screenplay – THE DEBT
Written by Michelle Patkowski

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
SARAFINA – Georgia Grant
ANIELA – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Romance, Drama

One soul, two life times, do we reincarnate into similar circumstances until we deal with the life we are born into and the choices we make, which determine our karmic debts.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

My script, “The Debt” is based on my own history with sexual abuse and my parent’s past in Poland. Its core premise is based on a Tibetan Buddhism philosophy called Lenchak, which is translated as Karmic debt.

My story spans two generations so that I can illustrate the importance of solving our “issues” now – in our current life – so that we can avoid similar circumstances in our next life.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It has a powerful message about the challenges that people with mental illness face and how you can choose to handle what circumstances you have been dealt in life, and ultimately a mental illness does not need to define you or the future quality of life you have, it can be managed with hard work.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Powerful, confronting.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Sixteen Candles and Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Since 2015.

How many stories have you written?

Eight screenplays, but I have only sent two out into the world to competitions and agents/producers.

What motivated you to write this screenplay

The catalyst was an emotional break down I went through.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None, it poured out of me, when I was in recovery, it was a cathartic experience, that helped me heal.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Horses, I have studied and worked with and healed them for over twenty years now.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Getting an actual table read of the first scene is an honour, but also gives life to written words. I’m always open to all kinds of feedback, when you finish a script you have to let it go to some extent and other people’s perspectives and feedback can make your re-writes more productive making the script better, my initial feelings were very positive.

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

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Watch the March 2017 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the March 2017 1st Scene Script Winners:

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – EVEN HERE I EXIST
March 2017 Reading
Written by Dylan Stump

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – REARRANGING ROXY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Bridget Bell McMahon

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – WELCOME TO ARCADIA
March 2017 Reading
Written by Jason Lan

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MONSTER MURDER MYSTERY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Arran McDermott

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE COURIER
March 2017 Reading
Written by Michael Dambrosio

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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1st Scene Screenplay – FAN SITE, by Elisha Barnes

Best Scene from the screenplay FAN SITE Screenplay
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
ASHLEIGH – Petra O’Toole
DANNI – Rachel Salsberg
JOAN – Georgia Grant
MAN – Craig Estrella

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Romance, Drama

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.


Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Rom-Com and dramedy

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

For one thing there is a dearth of movies about lesbians who aren’t criminals, psychos or prisoners. The women in my story lead everyday lives; never has a mainstream production company released a lesbian Rom-Com and the time is right for such a picture.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Funny & Sexy

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

A tie between Wizard of Oz and Spinal Tap

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Off-and-on two years

6. How many stories have you written?

Five screenplays (and am in the note-taking stage for my 6th), 14 short stories, two novels and one one-act stage play.
My screenplays are currently for sale on Amazon.com in case anyone is curious how they turned out. Just go to Amazon.com and put “Elisha Barnes” in the search field and up popd three.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Well, this is kind of embarrassing to admit but I once had a supercrush on a movie star and I thought if I built her a gee-whiz fan site she would contact me. She didn’t.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The feedback I received literally tore it apart and this is the 10th rewrite of the script.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Going to the movies, Netflix, flea markets and garage sales and my two dogs, Pumpkin and Teak.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had such a positive experience with my first entry – She’s Driving Me CRazy (also for sale) – that I had to try again. I’ve been thrilled with the feedback even though I don’t agree with all of it, but that’s normal.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – INT. CAR – NIGHT by Martin Keady

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Best Scene from the screenplay INT. CAR – NIGHT Screenplay
Written by Martin Keady
CAST LIST:NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
PATRICK – Hugh Ritchie
YOUNG MAN – David Occhipinti

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A middle-aged accountant has to drive home from work because there is a tube strike. When he stops at a traffic light, a young man taps on his windscreen – with a gun – and orders him to let him in.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The enforced meeting of absolute opposites, as a middle-aged accountant is carjacked by a crazed, gun-wielding drug addict.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and road movie.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because (I hope!) it takes the viewer on the same mad, uncontrollable journey that the hero (the middle-aged accountant) is taken on.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Carjacking vérité.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Withnail & I.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I must confess that this is one of the quickest scripts I have ever written – about a week, including a few all-nighters (fittingly, for a film about a carjacking that lasts a whole night).

How many stories have you written?

About 10 feature-length screenplays, including The Shakespeare Plays, a biopic of Shakespeare (http://theshakespeareplays.com/); about 20 to 30 short films; and about a further 10 stage plays and radio plays.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I was originally commissioned to adapt a novel about a carjacking that was so utterly unbelievable, implausible and plain atrocious that I just couldn’t do it. Instead, I was inspired to write an original screenplay about a REAL carjacking, which happened to a friend of mine and was utterly terrifying. She survived – just – and I thought that if I could take an audience on that journey I would have a great movie script.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Like all writers, a shortage of time. I was working during the day at the time, which is why I had to write it at night, which, of course, is the best time to write: no phone calls (or tweets, emails, etc.); no interruptions of any kind; and in addition your brain is naturally attuned to being halfway between sleep and waking, which is probably the best place to be as a writer.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Shakespeare (hence the Shakespeare biopic); sport (especially football and tennis, which I write about for LastWordOnSports.com); and (writing about and thus fighting in my own small way) injustice!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

After years (indeed, decades) of hiding my light under a bushel, as it were, I am finally determined to get my writing “out there” – whatever the response (good or bad, but hopefully not indifferent). The most useful part of the feedback was a comment about the title, “INT. CAR. NIGHT.”, saying that it did not really “fit” the story, as it was “too meta”. I understand and appreciate that, which is why, having thought about it, I would now switch the title back to one of the original two titles I had – either just “CARJACK” or “HIT THE NORTH”, a title borrowed from a great Fall song and utterly fitting for this story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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