1st Scene Screenplay – FAN SITE, by Elisha Barnes

Best Scene from the screenplay FAN SITE Screenplay
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
ASHLEIGH – Petra O’Toole
DANNI – Rachel Salsberg
JOAN – Georgia Grant
MAN – Craig Estrella

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Romance, Drama

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.


Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Rom-Com and dramedy

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

For one thing there is a dearth of movies about lesbians who aren’t criminals, psychos or prisoners. The women in my story lead everyday lives; never has a mainstream production company released a lesbian Rom-Com and the time is right for such a picture.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Funny & Sexy

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

A tie between Wizard of Oz and Spinal Tap

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Off-and-on two years

6. How many stories have you written?

Five screenplays (and am in the note-taking stage for my 6th), 14 short stories, two novels and one one-act stage play.
My screenplays are currently for sale on Amazon.com in case anyone is curious how they turned out. Just go to Amazon.com and put “Elisha Barnes” in the search field and up popd three.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Well, this is kind of embarrassing to admit but I once had a supercrush on a movie star and I thought if I built her a gee-whiz fan site she would contact me. She didn’t.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The feedback I received literally tore it apart and this is the 10th rewrite of the script.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Going to the movies, Netflix, flea markets and garage sales and my two dogs, Pumpkin and Teak.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had such a positive experience with my first entry – She’s Driving Me CRazy (also for sale) – that I had to try again. I’ve been thrilled with the feedback even though I don’t agree with all of it, but that’s normal.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – INT. CAR – NIGHT by Martin Keady

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Best Scene from the screenplay INT. CAR – NIGHT Screenplay
Written by Martin Keady
CAST LIST:NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
PATRICK – Hugh Ritchie
YOUNG MAN – David Occhipinti

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A middle-aged accountant has to drive home from work because there is a tube strike. When he stops at a traffic light, a young man taps on his windscreen – with a gun – and orders him to let him in.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The enforced meeting of absolute opposites, as a middle-aged accountant is carjacked by a crazed, gun-wielding drug addict.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and road movie.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because (I hope!) it takes the viewer on the same mad, uncontrollable journey that the hero (the middle-aged accountant) is taken on.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Carjacking vérité.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Withnail & I.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I must confess that this is one of the quickest scripts I have ever written – about a week, including a few all-nighters (fittingly, for a film about a carjacking that lasts a whole night).

How many stories have you written?

About 10 feature-length screenplays, including The Shakespeare Plays, a biopic of Shakespeare (http://theshakespeareplays.com/); about 20 to 30 short films; and about a further 10 stage plays and radio plays.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I was originally commissioned to adapt a novel about a carjacking that was so utterly unbelievable, implausible and plain atrocious that I just couldn’t do it. Instead, I was inspired to write an original screenplay about a REAL carjacking, which happened to a friend of mine and was utterly terrifying. She survived – just – and I thought that if I could take an audience on that journey I would have a great movie script.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Like all writers, a shortage of time. I was working during the day at the time, which is why I had to write it at night, which, of course, is the best time to write: no phone calls (or tweets, emails, etc.); no interruptions of any kind; and in addition your brain is naturally attuned to being halfway between sleep and waking, which is probably the best place to be as a writer.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Shakespeare (hence the Shakespeare biopic); sport (especially football and tennis, which I write about for LastWordOnSports.com); and (writing about and thus fighting in my own small way) injustice!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

After years (indeed, decades) of hiding my light under a bushel, as it were, I am finally determined to get my writing “out there” – whatever the response (good or bad, but hopefully not indifferent). The most useful part of the feedback was a comment about the title, “INT. CAR. NIGHT.”, saying that it did not really “fit” the story, as it was “too meta”. I understand and appreciate that, which is why, having thought about it, I would now switch the title back to one of the original two titles I had – either just “CARJACK” or “HIT THE NORTH”, a title borrowed from a great Fall song and utterly fitting for this story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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First Scene Festival Announces its 2016 Screenplay Winners (31 Total)

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Watch ALL 31 1st Scene Script Winners for 2016.

WATCH the best of script readings
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – 20/20: SEARCH FOR INDEPENDENCE
November 2016 Reading
Written by Harold L Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GOD’S LITTLE GAG
November 2016 Reading
Written by Sean Nash
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE BURIED MOON AND HER DAUGHTER
November 2016 Reading
Written by Rena Dunsworth
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: NIGHT WIND TO BAHIA
October 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CRIME CYCLE
October 2016 Reading
Written by Donald R. Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: VOODOO LOVE
September 2016 Reading
Written by Frederick Julius
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: OLD BONES
September 2016 Reading
Written by Dermott Hayes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CHASING THE WIND
September 2016 Reading
Written by Corean Strong
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
August 2016 Reading
Written by Vincent Masson
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – HALFWAY
August 2016 Reading
Written by Lukas Hassel
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
July 2016 Reading
Written by Shiv Sudhakar
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – CATCH!
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jerry Nield
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – NINE SCARS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Kelly Crawford
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – STARBOUND
June 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – EXISTENTIAL QUANDARY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Brandon Maline
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – WHEN THERE WAS TIME
June 2016 Reading
Written by James Gillard, Kevin McGruder
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – PUPPETS
May 2016 Reading
Written by James Griffiths
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RORSCHACH
May 2016 Reading
Written by Federico Franchi, Filippo Pierangelini
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – MAN SEEKING MONEY
April 2016 Reading
Written by Steve Mikals
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RENAISSANCE MAN
March 2016 Reading
Written by Robert Tolz
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ELISSA OF TYRE
March 2016 Reading
Written by Alan Mehanna
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – BEFORE GOD
March 2016 Reading
Written by Stuart Wright
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ROAD TO TEXAS
February 2016 Reading
Written by Emanuel Ruggeri
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – THE SHOT
February 2016 Reading
Written by Michael DeMattia
ACTOR1st Scene -PURGATORY
January 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene – GUNNISON
January 2016 Reading
Written by Daniel Duane

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners:

 

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

 

 

1st Scene Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY by Elisha Barnes

Watch the December 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
MAN – Christopher Huron
JOAN – Rachel Salsberg
TERRI – Georgia Grant
PETE – Rais Moui

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Comedy, Romance

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery is living with her ex in abstinence – an ex who still carries a torch for her. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by building her the hottest fan site on the web.

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

It’s about a woman who works in a doctor’s office who finds herself in a boring marriage – until she meets a handsome stranger at a supermarket. Now this woman – who is a maniacal driver – soon falls in love with the stranger and finds herself plotting her husband’s death. And it isn’t the first time she sought this solution to an unsatisfactory marriage.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Dark Comedy and Rom-Com.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because it’s a very timely subject with all the road rage out there and it’s very funny, too. Memorable characters.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Darkly funny

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Wizard of Oz – can’t get enough of those munchkins.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

One year

6. How many stories have you written?

I’ve completed five screenplays, 14 short stories and two novels.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Some jerk cut me off and I found myself fantasizing about all the ways I could get back at him.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Periods of writer’s block.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Garage sales, flea markets, the jersey shore, and, most of all, going to the movies.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Someone told me about it and I thought “Hmmmm, that sounds interesting.”


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

1st Scene Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT, by Mike Briock

Watch the December 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

MALICIOUS INTENT
Written by Mike Briock

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
JOHNNIE – Craig Estrella
VANESSA – Rachel Salsberg
ERIN – Georgia Grant
SPIDER – Christopher Huron
BENNY – Rais Moui

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Crime, Thriller, Mystery

The manhunt for a violent parole violator takes a deadly and harrowing turn when he turns the table on his pursuers (female Deputy Parole Officer and two Detectives) and comes after them instead with no mercy.

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Malicious Intent is about New York Deputy Parole Officer Erin Green and a team of NYPD Detectives are on a manhunt for vicious, vile, and ultra-violent parole violator Johnnie Carrillo, who has an Armani exterior with the personality of an automatic shotgun. Johnnie’s name strikes fear into anyone living in the seedy underbelly of New York City. Things take a very chilling, deadly, incredibly harrowing, and suspenseful turn when Johnnie unexpectedly turns the table on his pursuers… and comes after them without mercy.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama. Suspense. Thriller.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It has an independent vibe and budget. It is a believable, dramatic, intense, suspenseful, edge of your seat unrelenting thriller. Straightforward. Johnnie Carrillo is an intense and memorable character whom people will certainly talk about. Very strong female lead and supporting roles. It is a story that keeps you locked in from FADE IN to FADE OUT.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Harrowing. Suspenseful.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

This question is very tough to answer. Hard to limit to a single film. I would say Mean Streets. The Fugitive. Goodfellas.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

16 months.

6. How many stories have you written?

6 screenplays (completed). Currently working on 3 more, which are in various stages of completion.. I have another 8 screenplays plotted and ready to write.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I really wanted to write something gritty, intense, and suspenseful with an independent feel and vibe. I wanted it to be strong female protagonists in great peril against the most vile and vicious bad maIe antagonist I could dream up. Someone so badass and cold that he is seemingly unstoppable and thoroughly grips the audience. I wanted it to feel “real” and “believable”, but at the same time keep you on the edge of your seat.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Editing. Making hard decisions to delete a few good scenes to maximize flow. Also, the ending. I had two very good endings. I went with the ending I felt is more believable. In the other ending, the lead female protagonist makes a decision that the audience would love, but that she really wouldn’t make in real life. So, in the end, I kept it real.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Photography.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was actually contacted by the festival and asked to enter. I was given an offer I couldn’t refuse.


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

1st Scene: DOORLOCKER by Tony DiSibio and BL Cooper

Watch the December 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

DOORLOCKER
Written by Tony DiSibio and BL Cooper

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
TONY – Craig Estrella
COOP – Rais Moui

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Family

A comedy about a family man who has a talent for making bath time an event for his two young daughters and a wife who thinks the whole thing is a crock.
Let Dad be great…..
……for once.
*Doorlocker*

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Doorlocker is about a dad who displaces the notion that moms are the best at EVERYTHING when it comes to child care around the house.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Doorlocker is a comedy that highlights the parody that exists between husband, wife, and home life. We are currently working on stretching Doorlocker into a feature length script with a TON of laughs and a great story to go with it.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Doorlocker should be made into a movie because it’s a funny and relatable glimpse into home life with kids. These days with both parents HAVING to work in modern families, dads are having to prove their worth even more around the house. Mothers are more confident in that role whereas the fathers need a little reassurance in a job well done. Can dads maybe get a pat on the back (or the butt) for doing a good job with the kids without disdain from their wife? Or is it always going to be like: “Are you kidding me, what do you want, applause for changing that diaper?” So come on, let Dad be great…..for once!

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

If I had to use only two words to describe this screenplay, they would be…”Dad power!”.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

It’s a probably a tie between Swingers (Jon Favreau and Vince Vaughn) and The Big Lebowski. Although Beautiful Girls is probably up there too. I’ve seen them countless times. I love movies!

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

We have been working on this screenplay for 6 months. We’ve had it on the festival circuit for about a year.

6. How many stories have you written?

My writing partner (B.L. Cooper) and I are currently working on 6 shorts and 1 feature. All packed with laughs!

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

After hearing about my writing partner (B.L. Cooper’s) home life and how much it cracked us up, I told him how I can see it playing out as a movie in my head. He urged me to get it down on paper and thus my love for screenwriting began!

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The only obstacles I faced in writing Doorlocker was HOW to write it in proper screenplay format. Since I have no film school, I had to teach myself everything from scratch. After MANY edits and paid script analysis/feedback that tore me apart on what I was doing wrong, I made the adjustments and finally came away with a finished product. I also came away with a genuine love for the craft and am now obsessed with it.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Aside from screenwriting, I love playing fantasy football and baseball- geek alert! Above all else I’m passionate about being a good father and husband. My family is everything to me.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I entered your festival because of the unique prize you give to the winning screenplay. Having actors bring your screenplay to life is the coolest prize ever.


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne