Winning 1st Scene – Sandstorm by Neil Chase

Winning Screenplay – SANDSTORM
Written by Neil Chase

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Cora Matheson
MITCH – Daniel Chung
ROY – John Fray

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Thriller

Sandstorm is a disaster film about a single mom and her deadbeat ex who race to save their daughter as a massive sandstorm devastates their hometown.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Sandstorm is a disaster film about a single mom and her deadbeat ex who race to save their daughter as a massive sandstorm devastates their hometown.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Action, thriller.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It’s unlike other disaster films in that it’s written with a smaller budget in mind, and centers around the relationships and dysfunctional family dynamics of our lead characters more than on the spectacle of the devastation. That said, there’s something here for everyone – action, comedy, drama, and most of all, heart.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Fun ride.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Star Wars.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

The first draft took two weeks. Then a few months more for feedback and rewrites.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been writing since I was a kid, so it’s hard to say how many short stories there have been. That said, I’ve written thirteen feature screenplays, numerous short screenplays, and my debut novel is about to get published.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I always wanted to write a disaster film. So I picked one that I haven’t seen before.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None that I can think of. It was a fun experience from start to finish.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My other passion is acting, which actually helps me to be a better screenwriter, as I’ve learned where to focus in terms of dialogue, action lines, and so on. I try to write the kinds of scripts I would want to read as an actor.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The First Scene Screenplay Festival seemed like a great way to test the waters with this script. I’m grateful for the win.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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1st SCENE Reading of THE DEBT, by Michelle Patkowski

Winning Screenplay – THE DEBT
Written by Michelle Patkowski

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
SARAFINA – Georgia Grant
ANIELA – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Romance, Drama

One soul, two life times, do we reincarnate into similar circumstances until we deal with the life we are born into and the choices we make, which determine our karmic debts.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

My script, “The Debt” is based on my own history with sexual abuse and my parent’s past in Poland. Its core premise is based on a Tibetan Buddhism philosophy called Lenchak, which is translated as Karmic debt.

My story spans two generations so that I can illustrate the importance of solving our “issues” now – in our current life – so that we can avoid similar circumstances in our next life.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It has a powerful message about the challenges that people with mental illness face and how you can choose to handle what circumstances you have been dealt in life, and ultimately a mental illness does not need to define you or the future quality of life you have, it can be managed with hard work.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Powerful, confronting.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Sixteen Candles and Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Since 2015.

How many stories have you written?

Eight screenplays, but I have only sent two out into the world to competitions and agents/producers.

What motivated you to write this screenplay

The catalyst was an emotional break down I went through.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None, it poured out of me, when I was in recovery, it was a cathartic experience, that helped me heal.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Horses, I have studied and worked with and healed them for over twenty years now.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Getting an actual table read of the first scene is an honour, but also gives life to written words. I’m always open to all kinds of feedback, when you finish a script you have to let it go to some extent and other people’s perspectives and feedback can make your re-writes more productive making the script better, my initial feelings were very positive.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

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Watch the March 2017 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the March 2017 1st Scene Script Winners:

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – EVEN HERE I EXIST
March 2017 Reading
Written by Dylan Stump

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – REARRANGING ROXY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Bridget Bell McMahon

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – WELCOME TO ARCADIA
March 2017 Reading
Written by Jason Lan

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MONSTER MURDER MYSTERY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Arran McDermott

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE COURIER
March 2017 Reading
Written by Michael Dambrosio

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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1st Scene Screenplay – FAN SITE, by Elisha Barnes

Best Scene from the screenplay FAN SITE Screenplay
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
ASHLEIGH – Petra O’Toole
DANNI – Rachel Salsberg
JOAN – Georgia Grant
MAN – Craig Estrella

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Romance, Drama

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.


Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Rom-Com and dramedy

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

For one thing there is a dearth of movies about lesbians who aren’t criminals, psychos or prisoners. The women in my story lead everyday lives; never has a mainstream production company released a lesbian Rom-Com and the time is right for such a picture.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Funny & Sexy

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

A tie between Wizard of Oz and Spinal Tap

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Off-and-on two years

6. How many stories have you written?

Five screenplays (and am in the note-taking stage for my 6th), 14 short stories, two novels and one one-act stage play.
My screenplays are currently for sale on Amazon.com in case anyone is curious how they turned out. Just go to Amazon.com and put “Elisha Barnes” in the search field and up popd three.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Well, this is kind of embarrassing to admit but I once had a supercrush on a movie star and I thought if I built her a gee-whiz fan site she would contact me. She didn’t.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The feedback I received literally tore it apart and this is the 10th rewrite of the script.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Going to the movies, Netflix, flea markets and garage sales and my two dogs, Pumpkin and Teak.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had such a positive experience with my first entry – She’s Driving Me CRazy (also for sale) – that I had to try again. I’ve been thrilled with the feedback even though I don’t agree with all of it, but that’s normal.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – INT. CAR – NIGHT by Martin Keady

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Best Scene from the screenplay INT. CAR – NIGHT Screenplay
Written by Martin Keady
CAST LIST:NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
PATRICK – Hugh Ritchie
YOUNG MAN – David Occhipinti

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A middle-aged accountant has to drive home from work because there is a tube strike. When he stops at a traffic light, a young man taps on his windscreen – with a gun – and orders him to let him in.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The enforced meeting of absolute opposites, as a middle-aged accountant is carjacked by a crazed, gun-wielding drug addict.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and road movie.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because (I hope!) it takes the viewer on the same mad, uncontrollable journey that the hero (the middle-aged accountant) is taken on.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Carjacking vérité.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Withnail & I.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I must confess that this is one of the quickest scripts I have ever written – about a week, including a few all-nighters (fittingly, for a film about a carjacking that lasts a whole night).

How many stories have you written?

About 10 feature-length screenplays, including The Shakespeare Plays, a biopic of Shakespeare (http://theshakespeareplays.com/); about 20 to 30 short films; and about a further 10 stage plays and radio plays.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I was originally commissioned to adapt a novel about a carjacking that was so utterly unbelievable, implausible and plain atrocious that I just couldn’t do it. Instead, I was inspired to write an original screenplay about a REAL carjacking, which happened to a friend of mine and was utterly terrifying. She survived – just – and I thought that if I could take an audience on that journey I would have a great movie script.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Like all writers, a shortage of time. I was working during the day at the time, which is why I had to write it at night, which, of course, is the best time to write: no phone calls (or tweets, emails, etc.); no interruptions of any kind; and in addition your brain is naturally attuned to being halfway between sleep and waking, which is probably the best place to be as a writer.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Shakespeare (hence the Shakespeare biopic); sport (especially football and tennis, which I write about for LastWordOnSports.com); and (writing about and thus fighting in my own small way) injustice!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

After years (indeed, decades) of hiding my light under a bushel, as it were, I am finally determined to get my writing “out there” – whatever the response (good or bad, but hopefully not indifferent). The most useful part of the feedback was a comment about the title, “INT. CAR. NIGHT.”, saying that it did not really “fit” the story, as it was “too meta”. I understand and appreciate that, which is why, having thought about it, I would now switch the title back to one of the original two titles I had – either just “CARJACK” or “HIT THE NORTH”, a title borrowed from a great Fall song and utterly fitting for this story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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First Scene Festival Announces its 2016 Screenplay Winners (31 Total)

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Watch ALL 31 1st Scene Script Winners for 2016.

WATCH the best of script readings
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – 20/20: SEARCH FOR INDEPENDENCE
November 2016 Reading
Written by Harold L Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GOD’S LITTLE GAG
November 2016 Reading
Written by Sean Nash
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE BURIED MOON AND HER DAUGHTER
November 2016 Reading
Written by Rena Dunsworth
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: NIGHT WIND TO BAHIA
October 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CRIME CYCLE
October 2016 Reading
Written by Donald R. Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: VOODOO LOVE
September 2016 Reading
Written by Frederick Julius
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: OLD BONES
September 2016 Reading
Written by Dermott Hayes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CHASING THE WIND
September 2016 Reading
Written by Corean Strong
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
August 2016 Reading
Written by Vincent Masson
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – HALFWAY
August 2016 Reading
Written by Lukas Hassel
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
July 2016 Reading
Written by Shiv Sudhakar
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – CATCH!
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jerry Nield
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – NINE SCARS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Kelly Crawford
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – STARBOUND
June 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – EXISTENTIAL QUANDARY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Brandon Maline
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – WHEN THERE WAS TIME
June 2016 Reading
Written by James Gillard, Kevin McGruder
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – PUPPETS
May 2016 Reading
Written by James Griffiths
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RORSCHACH
May 2016 Reading
Written by Federico Franchi, Filippo Pierangelini
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – MAN SEEKING MONEY
April 2016 Reading
Written by Steve Mikals
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RENAISSANCE MAN
March 2016 Reading
Written by Robert Tolz
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ELISSA OF TYRE
March 2016 Reading
Written by Alan Mehanna
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – BEFORE GOD
March 2016 Reading
Written by Stuart Wright
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ROAD TO TEXAS
February 2016 Reading
Written by Emanuel Ruggeri
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – THE SHOT
February 2016 Reading
Written by Michael DeMattia
ACTOR1st Scene -PURGATORY
January 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene – GUNNISON
January 2016 Reading
Written by Daniel Duane

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners:

 

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson