1st Scene Screenplay – FAN SITE, by Elisha Barnes

Best Scene from the screenplay FAN SITE Screenplay
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
ASHLEIGH – Petra O’Toole
DANNI – Rachel Salsberg
JOAN – Georgia Grant
MAN – Craig Estrella

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Romance, Drama

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.


Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery lives in abstinence with her ex – an ex who still carries a torch. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by bulding her the hottest fan site on the web. After a series of successes and miscues, my story ends with an unlikely ending.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Rom-Com and dramedy

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

For one thing there is a dearth of movies about lesbians who aren’t criminals, psychos or prisoners. The women in my story lead everyday lives; never has a mainstream production company released a lesbian Rom-Com and the time is right for such a picture.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Funny & Sexy

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

A tie between Wizard of Oz and Spinal Tap

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Off-and-on two years

6. How many stories have you written?

Five screenplays (and am in the note-taking stage for my 6th), 14 short stories, two novels and one one-act stage play.
My screenplays are currently for sale on Amazon.com in case anyone is curious how they turned out. Just go to Amazon.com and put “Elisha Barnes” in the search field and up popd three.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Well, this is kind of embarrassing to admit but I once had a supercrush on a movie star and I thought if I built her a gee-whiz fan site she would contact me. She didn’t.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The feedback I received literally tore it apart and this is the 10th rewrite of the script.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Going to the movies, Netflix, flea markets and garage sales and my two dogs, Pumpkin and Teak.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had such a positive experience with my first entry – She’s Driving Me CRazy (also for sale) – that I had to try again. I’ve been thrilled with the feedback even though I don’t agree with all of it, but that’s normal.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – INT. CAR – NIGHT by Martin Keady

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Best Scene from the screenplay INT. CAR – NIGHT Screenplay
Written by Martin Keady
CAST LIST:NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
PATRICK – Hugh Ritchie
YOUNG MAN – David Occhipinti

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A middle-aged accountant has to drive home from work because there is a tube strike. When he stops at a traffic light, a young man taps on his windscreen – with a gun – and orders him to let him in.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The enforced meeting of absolute opposites, as a middle-aged accountant is carjacked by a crazed, gun-wielding drug addict.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and road movie.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because (I hope!) it takes the viewer on the same mad, uncontrollable journey that the hero (the middle-aged accountant) is taken on.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Carjacking vérité.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Withnail & I.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I must confess that this is one of the quickest scripts I have ever written – about a week, including a few all-nighters (fittingly, for a film about a carjacking that lasts a whole night).

How many stories have you written?

About 10 feature-length screenplays, including The Shakespeare Plays, a biopic of Shakespeare (http://theshakespeareplays.com/); about 20 to 30 short films; and about a further 10 stage plays and radio plays.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I was originally commissioned to adapt a novel about a carjacking that was so utterly unbelievable, implausible and plain atrocious that I just couldn’t do it. Instead, I was inspired to write an original screenplay about a REAL carjacking, which happened to a friend of mine and was utterly terrifying. She survived – just – and I thought that if I could take an audience on that journey I would have a great movie script.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Like all writers, a shortage of time. I was working during the day at the time, which is why I had to write it at night, which, of course, is the best time to write: no phone calls (or tweets, emails, etc.); no interruptions of any kind; and in addition your brain is naturally attuned to being halfway between sleep and waking, which is probably the best place to be as a writer.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Shakespeare (hence the Shakespeare biopic); sport (especially football and tennis, which I write about for LastWordOnSports.com); and (writing about and thus fighting in my own small way) injustice!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

After years (indeed, decades) of hiding my light under a bushel, as it were, I am finally determined to get my writing “out there” – whatever the response (good or bad, but hopefully not indifferent). The most useful part of the feedback was a comment about the title, “INT. CAR. NIGHT.”, saying that it did not really “fit” the story, as it was “too meta”. I understand and appreciate that, which is why, having thought about it, I would now switch the title back to one of the original two titles I had – either just “CARJACK” or “HIT THE NORTH”, a title borrowed from a great Fall song and utterly fitting for this story.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – OCD by Quyen Tran

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Best Scene from the screenplay OCD Screenplay
Written by Quyen Tran

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
VIKTOR – Hugh Ritchie
DR. NAVID – Robert Notman
GWEN – Olivia Jon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Romance

Two university lovers have an intense argument.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

OCD (working title) is about a young woman who begins to have dark obsessions after an HIV scare.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama, Dark-Comedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

The script is currently 231 pages so it could be either a TV mini-series or film series. OCD should be made because it’s
an untold story relevant to the Millennial age.

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Digital Loneliness”

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

It’s a tie between The Santa Clause or Deathproof.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Almost a year now.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written several short stories but this is my first full-length story.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Something happened to me a year ago that left me in a state of devastation and I began writing this. It was the only thing that
made me feel better.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

A major obstacle was finding a quiet place to write. I live in a loud household. It’s hard to write when there is some annoying
noise going on. I’m still trying to find a quiet, private place. Mostly, I write at night when everyone is asleep. Headphones,
earplugs, and music/atmospheric sound help.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m currently reading Les Miserables by Victor Hugo, which I had put off for years because it looked so long and boring.
But I’m so glad I started, because so far, it’s one of the best stories I’ve ever read.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had also just rewritten the first scene so it was kind of a sign for me. Also, I found a coupon code on Facebook.

The feedback was paramount to my script’s consistent progress. It really encouraged me as a new writer, because it’s rare to get encouragement when people think you’re in your room all the time doing nothing, and you’re actually writing.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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First Scene Festival Announces its 2016 Screenplay Winners (31 Total)

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Watch ALL 31 1st Scene Script Winners for 2016.

WATCH the best of script readings
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – 20/20: SEARCH FOR INDEPENDENCE
November 2016 Reading
Written by Harold L Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GOD’S LITTLE GAG
November 2016 Reading
Written by Sean Nash
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE BURIED MOON AND HER DAUGHTER
November 2016 Reading
Written by Rena Dunsworth
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: NIGHT WIND TO BAHIA
October 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CRIME CYCLE
October 2016 Reading
Written by Donald R. Brown
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: VOODOO LOVE
September 2016 Reading
Written by Frederick Julius
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: OLD BONES
September 2016 Reading
Written by Dermott Hayes
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CHASING THE WIND
September 2016 Reading
Written by Corean Strong
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
August 2016 Reading
Written by Vincent Masson
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – HALFWAY
August 2016 Reading
Written by Lukas Hassel
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SENIOR PRANK
July 2016 Reading
Written by Shiv Sudhakar
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – CATCH!
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jerry Nield
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – NINE SCARS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Kelly Crawford
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – STARBOUND
June 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – EXISTENTIAL QUANDARY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Brandon Maline
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – WHEN THERE WAS TIME
June 2016 Reading
Written by James Gillard, Kevin McGruder
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – PUPPETS
May 2016 Reading
Written by James Griffiths
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RORSCHACH
May 2016 Reading
Written by Federico Franchi, Filippo Pierangelini
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – MAN SEEKING MONEY
April 2016 Reading
Written by Steve Mikals
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – RENAISSANCE MAN
March 2016 Reading
Written by Robert Tolz
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ELISSA OF TYRE
March 2016 Reading
Written by Alan Mehanna
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – BEFORE GOD
March 2016 Reading
Written by Stuart Wright
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ROAD TO TEXAS
February 2016 Reading
Written by Emanuel Ruggeri
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – THE SHOT
February 2016 Reading
Written by Michael DeMattia
ACTOR1st Scene -PURGATORY
January 2016 Reading
Written by Alex A. Kecskes
ACTOR1st Scene – GUNNISON
January 2016 Reading
Written by Daniel Duane

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners:

 

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

 

 

1st Scene Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY by Elisha Barnes

Watch the December 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
Written by Elisha Barnes

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
MAN – Christopher Huron
JOAN – Rachel Salsberg
TERRI – Georgia Grant
PETE – Rais Moui

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Comedy, Romance

Sexy lesbian Danni Montgomery is living with her ex in abstinence – an ex who still carries a torch for her. Meanwhile Danni is eyeing up a bisexual movie star and attempts to woo her by building her the hottest fan site on the web.

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

It’s about a woman who works in a doctor’s office who finds herself in a boring marriage – until she meets a handsome stranger at a supermarket. Now this woman – who is a maniacal driver – soon falls in love with the stranger and finds herself plotting her husband’s death. And it isn’t the first time she sought this solution to an unsatisfactory marriage.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Dark Comedy and Rom-Com.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because it’s a very timely subject with all the road rage out there and it’s very funny, too. Memorable characters.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Darkly funny

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Wizard of Oz – can’t get enough of those munchkins.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

One year

6. How many stories have you written?

I’ve completed five screenplays, 14 short stories and two novels.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Some jerk cut me off and I found myself fantasizing about all the ways I could get back at him.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Periods of writer’s block.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Garage sales, flea markets, the jersey shore, and, most of all, going to the movies.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Someone told me about it and I thought “Hmmmm, that sounds interesting.”


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

1st Scene Screenplay – UNSPOKEN, by Amber Epling

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UNSPOKEN
Written by Amber Epling

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
GABRIEL – Craig Estrella
CELESTE – Rachel Salsberg
DOCTOR WATERS – Georgia Grant
RUSS – Charles Gordon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Mystery

Celeste Grey, a mentally-challenged 20-something girl, who has no ability to speak escapes from an institution after being raped by an associate of the institute. By fate, she ends up on a ranch with 50-something RUSS, whose wife had been institutionalized before committing suicide, and his handsome, self-centered adult son (GABE).

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Unspoken is about a young woman who is mentally disabled and she finds her way to a ranch, where a man and his son take her in and care for her and her soon to be unborn child. While they are trying to hang onto their ranch, they come to realize that, while they thought they were helping her, she actually winds up helping them.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

The genre is a drama.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

This movie is very inspiring to a lot of people in this world. This woman who is lost, alone, deaf and is pregnant has no hope in the world. The hope she finds is in two people who would be the most unlikely candidates to take care of her. It goes to show that just because people have disabilities and can’t speak for themselves doesn’t mean that they are voiceless and that they don’t have a heart. They just might be the ones to save you, not the other way around.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Dramatic and Uplifting

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Man In The Iron Mask and The American President

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

This film has been completed for several years now, just waiting for the right opportunity.

6. How many stories have you written?

Over the course of 15 years I have written 20 films.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

This story came about in regards to a family member who suffered a tragedy that resulted in her having extreme handicaps after giving birth to her second daughter. She can’t speak, she can’t feed herself or walk, but she is bright and very intelligent. She still has her mind and uses it to communicate to her family by using a letter board. Much like the main character, she suffers deafness and has to be treated much like a child. That is kind of what brought the story to a head.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The only obstacles that I faced while writing this, was the obstacles that I have faced with all of my films. I have been trying my best to get my work publicized and at times I felt like I was in a stalemate and that my films could never make it, but I realized that I was good enough and I knew this was a film that had a great message and it needed to be told, so I finished it. Along with the personal story that comes along with this story, I knew I had to do this, so I gathered all my courage and strength and told myself that this was one that will mean the most.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Photography

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was on Twitter and the account for the festival came up and I checked it out and decided to give it a try.


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne