Winning 1st Scene Reading of AVES, by Daniel L Burke

Winning Screenplay – AVES
Written by Daniel L. Burke

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julian Ford
ALFRED – Mandip Brar
GRAMPS – Allan Brunet
DR. BLACK – Sean Ballantyne
CHRISTINE – Amanda Quach
MARVIN – Zake O’Connor
DR. OHNO – Kayla Lakhani

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Horror

Mankind fights birds for control of planet Earth in an Apocalyptic battle of Armageddon.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

In the year 1980 residents of an Ohio town are rounded up and executed for the takeover of their land.

Now.

From the deepest part of space, a lost space probe filled with lethal alien radiation returns to earth. The President orders a strike of nuclear missiles.

On vacation, a horrified family watches the missile attack. They stare haplessly as the radiation from the destroyed probe encircles the planet. Filled with anxiety; the family attempts to returns home with the mother and son carrying a deep secret.

The alien radiation encircling the earth transforms the planet’s billions of birds to instruments of death and destruction. They are stronger, and more intelligent, and realize that man must die. Soon the Aves of the world join forces and attack.

In multiple battles, the fleeing family fights the violent birds on their quest to safety. Of the six-member family only two survive, the mother and daughter. The two finally reach their destination; a military bunker sitting deep in the Ohio hillside. In the fortified structure, the mother reveals her plan for world domination with her lover, the President’s leading General. The daughter realizes that she is the only one who can stop the insanity. It’s a fight between daughter, mother, the General and birds for rule of the planet. In the supreme battle inside the bunker, only the daughter survives. The finger of God saves the world as a massive solar flare cleans the atmosphere of the alien radiation.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Horror, Sci-fi, Drama, Suspense, Thriller, Action, Fantasy, Adventure

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Two reasons. The world needs quality entertainment. Second, it opens the door to my world of films.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Surpassing splendor

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

That’s a good question and I really don’t think I can answer it. And that’s because I watch my new movies until I wear out the grooves. Then I don’t watch them for awhile. But if I was on a deserted island with one movie; it would be “West Side Story.”

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

To be perfectly honest, it only takes me about a month to write the raw draft, another half month for the refined script. The problem isn’t the script but the research. It consumes all the time and can take weeks.

How many stories have you written?

If you include manuscripts I will say about thirty-five. If you want to just want to know about my screenplays including musicals I would say, twenty.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Shooting photography I saw a chorus line of birds sitting on electrical wires and that was it.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None really unless you count researching the subject, I wrote “Aves” and “Looking For Love” back to back and they both flowed like water. It took about three and a half months. I missed October, November, December and the first part of January.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Photography and music. Those are my two main passions after writing. I have photographs on my FaceBook page and Deviant Art. Also, I have pieces of music that I composed on some of the music sites.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had entered your Logline Contest and figured I would give it a shot. Man I was mad because the mistakes were minor but major to the script.


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Winning 1st Scene Screenplay Reading of ROUND TRIP by Sherwin Allen

Winning Screenplay – ROUND TRIP
Written by Richard Geiwitz

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julian Ford
HUFFMAN – Allan Brunet
ARIEL – Amanda Quach

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Drama, Thriller

A timid woman wakes up, all alone on a 747 at 30,000 feet, she must learn to find the courage in order to survive this no win situation.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

It’s about a woman who wakes up on a plane at 30,000 feet and no one else is on the plane, except for one other passenger, but the underline theme is having the strength to change what we can and the serenity to accept the things we can not.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

It falls in the Horror/Drama category.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

This should be made into a movie, because it has suspense, and horror, and mixes a lot of phobias people have into one movie, being alone, fair of not being in control and the fear of flying

How would you describe this script in two words?

Heart Pounding.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Saving Private Ryan

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve been working on this screen play for 1 month, but now I’m working on turning it into a 120page script.

How many stories have you written?

So far I’ve written 6 scripts so far.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

My favorite song is Don’t Ask My Neighbor, I love almost any version of this song, but my favorite is by Bobby Caldwell.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The biggest obstacle was how to end it, since I like to write without knowing the end, because I feel if I don’t know what’s going to happen next neither will the reader.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m passionate about Directing films and traveling the world.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was motivated to enter, because I would be getting feedback on the first 10 pages which I think is the most critical part of a script, the make or break scenes. I was excited about the initial feedback, because it inspired me to push thru and finish the script.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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1st Scene of PAST PRESENCE by Kevin Mongelli

Winning Screenplay – PAST PRESENCE
Written by Kevin Mongelli

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
EDGAR – John Marcucci
SUZANNE – Amaka Umeh
JULIO – David Straus
JAMES – Mark Sparks

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Sci-Fi, Thriller

A professor obsessed with the idea of past lives, gets the chance to see his past via an extraordinary device, but his discovery leads to grave consequences.

  Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A professor obsessed with the idea of past lives, gets the chance to see his past via an extraordinary device, but his discovery leads to grave consequences.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Sci-Fi, Thriller, Drama

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It is an original and engaging story with unique characters. Also, I don’t know of another film that has a device similar to the one in this script.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Engaging, unique

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Gattaca

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It took me about four months to complete it

How many stories have you written?

Past Presence was my first full feature script. Am currently working on my second which will be a crime thriller.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I find that most films I watch are unsatisfying. I want to introduce a different kind of film that is more engaging to audiences.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Structure is always a challenge. Script readers help but each has a very different opinion so I chose a design that I thought best reflected the story.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I am a professional musician. I compose and perform original classical music for piano.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

​My one page screenplay “Raging Love” was selected for a reading through this festival and I was impressed with the performances. Valuable feedback.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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1st Scene of SPARKS by Jon Freda

Winning Screenplay – SPARKS
Written by Jon Freda

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
FRANK – Devin Upham
MONICA – Amaka Umeh
NICHOLS – David Straus
GUARD – Mark Sparks

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Mystery

A sheriff hunts a killer targeting both innocents and other criminals alike, but soon finds himself tangled in a conspiracy tied to the gruesome, deliberately botched execution of a former death row inmate as well the mysterious, four-legged witness that seems to connect them all.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The marketing calls we all receive over the phone – the cold calls – and which we all hate. Yet the results of this particular one have far reaching effects.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It is a drama about human relationships – and murder.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Human drama.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Same Time Next Year

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It started as a short story – which has been published – and evolved into the screenplay.

How many stories have you written?

Over 200.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Slightly All The Time by Soft Machine

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time, family commitments.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Family, reading and gardening.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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Winning 1st Scene Screenplay – OCD by Quyen Tran

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Best Scene from the screenplay OCD Screenplay
Written by Quyen Tran

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julie Sheppard
VIKTOR – Hugh Ritchie
DR. NAVID – Robert Notman
GWEN – Olivia Jon

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Romance

Two university lovers have an intense argument.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

OCD (working title) is about a young woman who begins to have dark obsessions after an HIV scare.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama, Dark-Comedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

The script is currently 231 pages so it could be either a TV mini-series or film series. OCD should be made because it’s
an untold story relevant to the Millennial age.

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Digital Loneliness”

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

It’s a tie between The Santa Clause or Deathproof.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Almost a year now.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written several short stories but this is my first full-length story.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Something happened to me a year ago that left me in a state of devastation and I began writing this. It was the only thing that
made me feel better.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

A major obstacle was finding a quiet place to write. I live in a loud household. It’s hard to write when there is some annoying
noise going on. I’m still trying to find a quiet, private place. Mostly, I write at night when everyone is asleep. Headphones,
earplugs, and music/atmospheric sound help.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m currently reading Les Miserables by Victor Hugo, which I had put off for years because it looked so long and boring.
But I’m so glad I started, because so far, it’s one of the best stories I’ve ever read.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had also just rewritten the first scene so it was kind of a sign for me. Also, I found a coupon code on Facebook.

The feedback was paramount to my script’s consistent progress. It really encouraged me as a new writer, because it’s rare to get encouragement when people think you’re in your room all the time doing nothing, and you’re actually writing.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


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Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners

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Watch the December 2016 1st Scene Script Winners:

 

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – YOU’VE CHANGED
December 2016 Reading
Written by Sam Sexton

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SHE DRIVES ME CRAZY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – UNSPOKEN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Ambert Epling

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – DOORLOCKER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Tony DiSibio & BL Cooper

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

 

 

1st Scene Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT, by Mike Briock

Watch the December 2016 Winning 1st Scene Screenplay.

MALICIOUS INTENT
Written by Mike Briock

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
JOHNNIE – Craig Estrella
VANESSA – Rachel Salsberg
ERIN – Georgia Grant
SPIDER – Christopher Huron
BENNY – Rais Moui

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Crime, Thriller, Mystery

The manhunt for a violent parole violator takes a deadly and harrowing turn when he turns the table on his pursuers (female Deputy Parole Officer and two Detectives) and comes after them instead with no mercy.

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Malicious Intent is about New York Deputy Parole Officer Erin Green and a team of NYPD Detectives are on a manhunt for vicious, vile, and ultra-violent parole violator Johnnie Carrillo, who has an Armani exterior with the personality of an automatic shotgun. Johnnie’s name strikes fear into anyone living in the seedy underbelly of New York City. Things take a very chilling, deadly, incredibly harrowing, and suspenseful turn when Johnnie unexpectedly turns the table on his pursuers… and comes after them without mercy.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama. Suspense. Thriller.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It has an independent vibe and budget. It is a believable, dramatic, intense, suspenseful, edge of your seat unrelenting thriller. Straightforward. Johnnie Carrillo is an intense and memorable character whom people will certainly talk about. Very strong female lead and supporting roles. It is a story that keeps you locked in from FADE IN to FADE OUT.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Harrowing. Suspenseful.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

This question is very tough to answer. Hard to limit to a single film. I would say Mean Streets. The Fugitive. Goodfellas.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

16 months.

6. How many stories have you written?

6 screenplays (completed). Currently working on 3 more, which are in various stages of completion.. I have another 8 screenplays plotted and ready to write.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I really wanted to write something gritty, intense, and suspenseful with an independent feel and vibe. I wanted it to be strong female protagonists in great peril against the most vile and vicious bad maIe antagonist I could dream up. Someone so badass and cold that he is seemingly unstoppable and thoroughly grips the audience. I wanted it to feel “real” and “believable”, but at the same time keep you on the edge of your seat.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Editing. Making hard decisions to delete a few good scenes to maximize flow. Also, the ending. I had two very good endings. I went with the ending I felt is more believable. In the other ending, the lead female protagonist makes a decision that the audience would love, but that she really wouldn’t make in real life. So, in the end, I kept it real.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Photography.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was actually contacted by the festival and asked to enter. I was given an offer I couldn’t refuse.


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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne